Modern Romance

Final Project Link

Music Silhouette by Opeth

(Open to light shining through a window, pan to see it hit a woman lying in bed.)

Male – All are told that love is supposed to make up for any deficiency that they might have.

(The Camera pans to follow the light beam to the girl’s face.)

Woman – There is always going to be a part of me that doesn’t quite live up to your standards

(Cut to close up of the woman’s face as the sun is eventually blotted out.)

Man – A couple promising to never hurt each other is like a country promising to never go to war

(Slowly Pan down to the pendent around her neck that reflects light.)

(Cut back to the woman lying in bed this time with less light and yet there is an invisible light that shines in her face in the darkness.)

Male – don’t ask me to coddle you and worry about your feelings when you have such a blatant disregard for mine.

(Cut to a shot of the city, man is sitting across the table talking.)

Female – I’m here because I want to be with you, I want to try.

(Cut to him outside of a lit diner, looking in through the window.)

Male – How is it that the woman’s version of love is to dare men to love them back?

(Cut to Woman walking alone on a dark street.  Intercut with disturbing images.  Finally cut to her walking towards camera on a dimly lit street until her face is in complete close up.)

Female – Don’t say you love someone unless there is nothing they can do to change your mind.

(Fade to Black)

Male – We all cover our fear at the possibility of what we really deserve.

(Cut to Title, fade to tag line.)

At the center of the lie is love.

Shot List

Panning shot from window with sunlight down to girl in the bed

Shot from other side of girl up at sunlight

Shot of face as light fades

Pan Down to pendent that is shining

Shining face weird light

Shot of the City, preferably in the morning

Man standing outside of lighted window

Shot of man stepping on woman’s face

Shot of nature eating itself

Shot of Decay

Shot of Diamond being modeled

Shot of woman walking away from camera

Shot of Woman Walking towards Camera

Shot of woman walking across frame

Shot of different body parts of girl as she walks by

Shot of girl taking into camera

Title Sequence

Production Company Sequence.

Redone Dialogue

Male – All are told that love is supposed to make up for any deficiency that they might have.

Woman – The white knight in shining armor doesn’t exist, because if he did, I wouldn’t have been hurt so many times.

Male – You haven’t given me a chance.

Woman – There is always going to be a part of me that doesn’t quite live up to your standards

Man – A couple promising to never hurt each other is like a country promising to never go to war.

Woman – Men and their wars.  If I could really be all that you needed there would be no need of them.

Male – don’t ask me to coddle you and worry about your feelings when you have such a blatant disregard for mine.

Female – I’m here because I want to be with you, I want to try, but what are you willing to do to show me how much you care.

Male – How is it that the woman’s version of love is to dare men to love them back?

Female – Don’t say you love someone unless there is nothing they can do to change your mind.

Male – We all cover our fear at the possibility of what we really deserve.

The link above is the pdf that isn’t supported by wordpress for my story boards.

I had a small issue with the pdf file i emailed myself of my original storyboards so I redid them here and used photobooth.  Please ignore my bad drawing.

Production Journal

This has not gone as planned at all.  I had started this by trying to do a trailer for a film I wrote about a year back that I was planning to do in the spring.  I knew that I needed to have something video on kickstarter prior to the winter and full preproduction to have an idea of what our finances were going to be looking at.  The process started by everyone who I had previously set up to be involved in the Spring not being in town or simply not being available due to prior commitments.  These things do happen, and I also knew that I didn’t need to have the actual cast present in the teaser as much as it was important to capture the tone of what I wanted the film to be about.  Looking at how many people were in some of the scenes I really only hoped to get a lead male and female and move from there, but this proved more difficult that it sounds as it is the middle of finals and everyone is busy trying to finish their own projects.  Pleading with local family and friends went to no avail as the weekend disappeared to yet another missed opportunity and the mounting pressure of a deadline approaches.  I no longer care if this good enough to get money, so long as it gets done.

I take the time for the weekend to get ahead in other classes with the hopes that someone will respond to one of my posts online by the end of the week.  By Sunday Night I have gone over my outline of what I wanted to get so many times for so many different assortments of people that I might get until I have boiled it down to bare bones two people; male and female to contrast against each other in their loneliness.  I have tried to limit the number of locations down to two, with heavy use of voice over to narrate an unseen prince over a vulnerable woman in the dark.  Not exactly my original idea.

After getting done with another project I can’t sleep Sunday night to the point that I drag my fiancé out of bed to shoot some things.  I had originally not wanted to use her because of her weight because I wanted to get into the consumerism of people as objects and how that relates to deserving them, but at this point I have given up on the idea of getting what I want with what time I have left.  She is very understanding of the weight issue as it relates to image but less forgiving of getting dragged out of bed at 3 in the morning on her day off.  She makes me buy her breakfast and I see a sparsely lit residential sidewalk for her to traverse.  I know that I want to end with a long walk into a close up for the only line to be delivered into the camera.  I make sure to take multiple takes as the lighting is not good, and even though it is looking ok on my screen, I am fearful that it won’t turn out or will be too dark and I don’t want to have to come back out here again.  I do this with several shots to include a wide shot to have her walk across the landscape in and out of shadow as well as many close up shots of various body parts in movement.  I know I am going to be inter-cutting this together along with glimpses of disturbing imagery that I still need to find.

I tell her to look melancholy, which she has no problem at this hour, and am sure to have her walk further in each shot than she needs to because I haven’t really got my timing down yet of the cut as I haven’t really broken down my music yet, so better safe than sorry.

Dec. 7

I have been busy these week with other finals and so were most of the people that I have access to, though I was able to secure an actor for this Sunday.  Friday night when I got home I started to piece together a rough cut of the film that I had shot and started to put it to music.  As Murphy’s law would dictate, after purchasing PC editing software, my PC’s hard drive goes out, so I am forced to do my cut on iMovie, which is not my first choice, but I really can’t afford the expense of purchasing new software for a very small project when I have faith/hope that my PC will be working again by the Spring.  This limits some of the techniques I was hoping to use and makes overlapping sounds more difficult than it needs to be, Apples not so subtle way of getting you to buy the upgraded version.

The footage that was shot whittles down to about 48 seconds, which really isn’t horrible, and meets the music track that I had set up for it, though if my outline is to be followed I still need about another minute and five seconds of stuff, and that doesn’t even include the production logo and title sequence which should take up at least ten seconds or so.  The software will not let me put in music tracks without video to support so I have inserted some home movies to get a rough cut of the music track so I just have to edit in the images later.  I still need to record the voice overs which I am a little nervous about because I have no idea where it will show up as a voice track on this program so I will probably do some practice voice over work for a throw away film to get the hang of it.  I also need to lift a couple of clips to intercut with the night walking sequence and thinking that I might want to play with some of the film quality elements but I am going to wait until I am done shooting everything else so that I can see how that will effect the cohesion of it all, not to mention that my options are very limited on iMovie.

Dec. 8

I have done some rewrites to the script and have had Jackie give her voice over work.  She is not the best actress and I would really like to find a more talented subject to redo this with, and am hoping the girl that I had cast for the Spring will be available sometime over the holidays as it really hasn’t taken Jackie very long to do her parts, but there is nothing technically wrong.  Also, the light outside has been very dreary the past few days.  I woke up early this morning to try and get the sunrise coming through the window but it was too overcast to get much of anything.  I have thought about ways to artificially make light come through, but I think all would prove too difficult, though it is supposed to clear up some tomorrow, so I am going to keep my fingers crossed and try to come up with an alternative in case that doesn’t work out.  Also supposed to meet Andrew tomorrow night for his male voice work and one scene though I might try to see how long I can keep him for and maybe make up some new things for him since Jackie is getting agitated quickly by my requests.

Dec. 9

As can be expected, there was absolutely no light again today, so I really couldn’t wait with my fingers crossed for tomorrow as I am quickly approaching my deadline.  It is dank and drizzly this morning, with no sunrise that counts, so I still tried to use the woman in bed which really is just filler at this point, but as I need time I’m going to keep it until I have something to replace it with.  I also though of rain and melancholy and had Jackie stand at the window looking out not really thinking of a narrative, but it does work well when I cut it with the music so I’m really just keeping my fingers crossed that this doesn’t further implode, but I am meeting Andrew tonight for voice over.  I am also toying with the structure some to having a constant contrast and juxtaposition of the male and female elements.  I showed a very early rough cut with quite a few stand in shots to Jackie and all she can comment on is how fat she looks.  I am trying my best to minimalize body shots for her, both for her self-conscious and because I am afraid of changing the dynamic so much that the story becomes unrecognizable and I’m not sure that you can have an obese girl as the object to desire.

Things with Andrew went fairly well, as he is much better at voice acting and seems to be a much better person to throw ideas off of, though our shoot was cut short thanks to some bad Jamaican food.  When I finally stopped being sick and started to edit I quickly saw that the new footage is way better than the old, and that my original template is going to be all but abandoned.  I can already see the disparity between the two that this is not a likely couple and just their juxtaposition does not sell, but there is nothing that can be done about that.  It is like getting actors that have no natural chemistry.  You know this is going to be bad, but you grit your teeth and try to force the circle through the square.

The male clips are no longer a contrast of strength to the wailing female disposition as much as yet another dose of melancholy.  The one thing the piece has going for it is the music really does carry a lot of the mood and at least there is a fair amount of movement.

Interesting story.  I had originally planned to keep the first and second half separate, with only the first half really having voice work, but through the course of editing on iMovie, which has a really long and arduous sound editing process, one of the sound bites found its way attached to the more shocking clips from the trailer and I think it fits.

Self Analysis

As I am waiting for the finalization of the project for me to load it onto youtube, I have a lot of thoughts about the work I have done, not only on this project, but on the overview of the class.  This is not my best work, not by a long shot, as it really did mostly consist of me begging for help from a lot of my busy friends, and finally settling on people.  I really can’t use this for what I wanted to, and will most likely be re shooting much of it over winter break when the cast is less busy.  I really can’t complain because that is part of the risk when you can’t afford to pay your talent; that they will have to give preference to what is paying the bills.  I think it stands as a good template for what I’m going to do.  I’m really happy with how music turned out, much like I thought that it would, though I had to re-edit the song, as it actually jumps to different parts of the same song in three places..  Not 100% happy with the levels (which is not to say I didn’t toy with them till I was almost insane), but I’m hardly a sound mixer, so for what it is I’m satisfied, because I think it plays fine.  Most of my issues are with getting some of the shots that I wanted, which thanks to weather I was unable to get, and performances, both of which I will have to go back for, but I think it gets it’s message across.  I think it startles enough.  I still am wondering if I should have cut the audio in the second half to use the insect eating scene and Andrew thought the perfect counter to the foot being the male horror would be the 50’s housewife.  Men fear the sexualization of women and women fear their domestication.  Still, if I got all that I had wanted, I wouldn’t have got a couple of the shots that I did get if I wasn’t desperately looking for something to fill time, and I really preferred the on the fly over the planned stuff I just don’t like using clips that are so obviously not my own.   I don’t think I would put it in my highlight reel, but I would definitely show it to people I work with as a reference.

Joseph Parker, VL Fall 2012

“Modern Romance”

Teaser Trailer


For my final project I would like to make a teaser trailer for a film project that I intend to begin filming in early Spring.  The film is about the disinformation that most people believe in the modern world that culminates in how we approach relationships and how our personal lives are marketed to us.  This teaser is essentially framing my story and highlighting key phrases and concepts of my story to show to potential investors.  The intended length is between a minute and a half to two minutes.


I got the idea for the film while watching reruns of Lois and Clark, and watching the dynamic of changing Superman into a babysitter of a purely ineffective partner, because it was very politically correct to have a strong female lead in the 90’s and really wanted to explore social implications of gender identity in relationships and to connect that with marketing.


Production is going to take place on weekends.  The script for the trailer is finished and I am looking to sit down with my DP this coming week to work out the shot lists and story boards.  My DP is hard to schedule through the week for filming, so looking to start begin filming on the trailer on November 30th and continue filming the following weekend to have time to edit.  I have already purchased the rights to the music; Swedish Prog band Opeth’s Silhouette.


I have a lot of inspirations for this, the chief among them being a plethora of romantic comedies that are atrociously unrealistic.  I think the chief offender was probably The Notebook  which focuses on both the concept of love at first sight as well as the idea of the male role to sacrifice for the female without ever bothering to get to know her or to perpetuate any kind of conversation beyond developing a sexual relationships.  If you contrast this to Almodovar’s Talk to Her which is about the projection of what we think a relationship is based upon with nothing more than attraction.  Visually, I was most inspired by the lighting schemes from The Exorcist that seem to focus on being isolated and encompassed by darkness, and I wanted to show dating and opening yourself up to people that you don’t know, or even trusting those that you think that you do, always has limitations and anxiety that ultimately ends with being alone and the anxiety of dealing with ourselves.  I wanted to do a romantic comedy that was not necessarily positive.  Another huge influence is and its many video blogs that are generally nothing but talking heads but always are able to keep my attention.


I am not expecting to get everything from my film across in this teaser, and it is hard to differentiate between the teaser and the project itself, as I feel the need to reference what the film is going to be trying to do to show examples of how the teaser is going to both portray what the film is trying to do, as well as not reveal all of its secrets.  I expect for the teaser, much like the film to be directed in an under forty audience of both men and women.  The trailer will start with an introduction to the general ideas of the film through dialogue by the male protagonist cut to a brooding piano piece and the darker outside images of a young woman walking alone.  Then the teaser will introduce the characters and their views on the world through a montage of some of the funnier lines and gags from the film followed by comments by both the girl and the boy of longing to be loved and being vulnerable.  The lasting affect is repercussions of allowing yourself to be vulnerable.

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7 Responses to Modern Romance

  1. kelgranlund says:

    I liked your idea, it was a really cool concept! Shots were a bit blurry and the story was a bit confusing at first. The music seemed to overpower the words too. Overall a good short film that can go far!

  2. josephtamayo says:

    I really enjoyed the tone that this trailer (or so I think it’s a trailer) conveyed. It’s obvious that there was a desire for the audience to feel unsettled, and the choice of music, shot selection, and narration made it very apparent. In spots, the footage is very dark and difficult to see, and the audio is a little murky, although I don’t know that that could have been helped. Also, the use of transitions I felt was a touch out of place, but other than that, overall, I feel the tone is strongest here and it conveys the mood the end film will create.

  3. I’m not completely sure what the main point of this video was supposed to be–the title is Modern Romance–is it supposed to be saying that all modern romance is plagued by insecurities and miscommunication? If thats true, it might have been nice to have some kind of resolution to these problems in the video. I thought it was an interesting, very original concept, and I liked that it was inspired by a movie you wrote. Basically, the movie involves a couple airing their grievances about what the other person wants from them in order to make a relationship work. Do you think this is just a “modern” problem? I thought the editing of this video was very good, and I liked that a lot of the images had the man and woman mirroring each others actions, though we never saw them face to face. The music swelled appropriately, and I thought using a wordless song was a good choice, as the voiceover from the characters is so important. Reading your proposal, I really admire that this was supposed to be an answer or reaction to the wide idea of romance that people have today. It was a very interesting idea, and I liked that it connected to the larger world. Very original concept!

    • The point of the video is that it is a trailer, or a teaser. I probably should have introduced that for context but I thought the coming 2014 was enough. I don’t think the point of a trailer is to resolve the conflict no matter what the film is about. I mean the trailer to 6th Sense didn’t end with “He’s really a ghost.” Just saying. I hope you can appreciate that I don’t want to publicly post my shooting script. In terms of this being a modern problem, in terms of the gender roles and how they interpret each other, the simple answer is no. There have been gender issues as long as there have been genders, but there is a large amount of media portrayal that drastically changes what we think we want in relationships. I actually did a long paper about how media tries to keep people habitually single because couples tend to spend less money than singles that go through cyclical six month relationships. How women’s dating magazines give conflicting advise on what to expect want from men to reality dating shows creating a mental connection between relationships and achievement. Also, the terms of what gender means are greatly changed, I would say that the idea of freedom for women means sexual freedom more than almost anything, which I think is a weird focus, while I would go so far as to say that a large part of feminism, at least currently, is very consumeristic. I realize that there have always been issues, but I wanted to focus on the artificial belief structures on both sides.

  4. vquirosu says:

    The trailer was pretty cool but the idea was unclear. I liked your film shots and theme, I think it is a very unique project. I suggest that you work on the audio switching from voices and background music, I think it can be integrated more eloquently. The acting was great and the story sounded very interesting. Some of the shots were too dark (I’m not sure if that was the intention) and quite blurry. Good job!

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